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SLUSH PILE contest, with helpful examples

Mister Nizz

THE CHALLENGE is to take a sentence from the SLUSH PILE POST (spelling & grammatical errors intact) and turn it into a workable paragraph done in the same style.

Examples (original sentence is quoted in bold, italicized font)

My Entry (non-scoring, of course)

The willowy king stood tehre with his usually sick disposition. From the faint light in the hallway, his yellow glaring cat eyes pointed at him.

"Now, see here" said the Willowy King to his usually sick disposition. "How many times must I command thee to keep my yellow, glaring cat eyes in their proper, darkened container? They catch the light in the hallway in a manner that is most unseemly to us. Attend to it, at once!" "Aye, your majesty" said the Disposition, between phlegmy coughs. "I'll attend on the instant," as he limped away to put the cat eyes in their proper, velvet lined container box.


Duncan's entry:

Out of the dark void came what looked like a giant rabbit followed by small rabbits which had looked as if they had undergone a mutation with three ears and 2 tails. They discovered they were on Rabbitania.

"Rabbitania? They call this place Rabbitania?" Dad said in a awed voice. "What big ears ..."

Dad never finished becasue just then out of the dark void came more giant rabbits follwed by small rabitts. There 3 ears were sharp and cut Dad to ribbons.


DIRECTIONS: Choose a sentence, quote it in full, and add a few more sentences to expand the original (using the comment link below). If I get 10 or more posts I'll announce a winner.

Disclaimer: mocking is not the intent here. It takes a lot of guts to lay bare your soul to the world as these aspiring writers have done. I can't help the fact that some of the entries are unintentionally hilarious, but try to be sensitive to the original writer's purpose when you are creating...